A couple of days again I posted the above cartoon that I wanted to try and improve.
I indentified a few areas to work on:
Her fishing outfit might be a bit on the bright side and tend to grab the attention. She’s wearing a yellow mac, red gloves, and green boots, all of which as bright or brighter than them pink of the pelican, which is where I want the attention to go.
Her fishing road bisects the pelican, I think this would be better if she was holding it at either a higher or lower angle.
I think I can do a better job with the sky.
The water can be improved as well.
Here is the amended version:
Here are the changes I made:
Her outfit is now a lot drabber.
The rod is now angled downwards.
I added an annoyed look to her face.
I added a bit more motion to the water, and some white clouds to the sky.
I added a coastline element in the background
I’m not 100% happy about the background coastline element, but I does think it connects the two characters.
What’s next?
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